I like the chords and rhythm a lot, but is generally sloppy. The drums, bass and all that are out of sync which you could fix with a little time and the vocals are way too low. You sound like you have a good voice so lets hear it! Again i say i like the chords and melody and i like that ending breakdown too, would be cool if it went back into the song and served as bridge type thing. Anyways i like it but it needs lots of improvement. Keep it up :D